Script 2nd Draft

second draft of script

After having the class look at our Animatic, it was suggested that we have another news report at the end of the film and this meant that we had to change our script.

Animatic Feedback

After discussing our animatic with the class it was obvious that we should make some changes. We asked questions after the class watched the animatic and their answers were really valuable.
Is the meaning of the film apparent to the viewer?
The howl + fullmoon suggests that Gregg has turned into a werewolf.
Not so clear when that its a werewolf because the killing happens in daylight; challenging conventions in the day example of a film that has a werewolf in the day is twilight- werewolf in day.
Chat on screen- animatic didn't show it was typed up on screen, suggests would be a bit boring? reaction shots?
The titles are too long, the titles aren't very clear to how the moon fits in with them.
Is framing good and could it be improved?
In the kitchen scene- need to put him on the outside of the window.
Does the shot of the moon zoom out? Should make it more clear that it's a tilt down.
Have we chosen appropriate shot distances? if not are they appropriate?
A lot of long shots? maybe a few reaction shots to break up the shots.
Polaroid picture- white background- just on animatic will be in woods
Are transions used appropriately?
suggested that we use multiple shots of pictures of the werewolf with good transitions
Is dialouge used appropriately if not why? Does the soundtrack support the visual images?
Lack of effects like doors and footsteps for just the animatic like leaves/ woods ect
Suggested improvements:
Soundtrack-boring
Titles in livetype
Make the change of day more obvious
Chilling sound when Gregg appears in the window
Is the film an appropriate length?
Think the film won't be very long, and the shots will be too long to make up length which will result in being boring.

After looking at the suggestions and the feedback we decided to make a few changes, this impacted on a change in the script. The next post will be our updated script.

Animatic

This is our animatic, to produce this we created our storyboard and put the frames together in final cut, we predicted how long each shot is which would give us the idea of how long the film will be. It also allows us to put a soundtrack on it to see how it would all look together.
When filming and editing the animatic will help us know the order of shots, where they are cut and where the sound best fits.

Location Research

The locations that are going to be needed in our film are;
- Living room
- Cafe
- Quiet Street
- Kitchen
- Woods

1) Is a cafe scene from the latest Harry Potter film, we are planning on making our own cafe scene and hope to create something similar. There are the tables, the till section of the cafe and all the necessary props to create an authentic scene
2) Is an example of a dark living room that will be similar to ours. The darkness will give a Gothic effect.
3) This is a kitchen from a scene in Marley and Me. Our kitchen will need to be a similar if not smaller in size so that we can film comfortably.
4) This is actually my house which has been the decided location for the outside shots, it's simple to get to, the street it's on is very quiet and has the drive we need for her to walk up.
5) This is an example of a wooded path. The female victim will be walking up wooded paths as she is watched by the werewolf.
6) In our film a bedroom will be needed for where the female victim will be. This is a still from Twilight a film which is very similar to ours, the bedroom is typically of a teenagers.
7) This is a photo of a random set of woods, they are very similar to the ones we will be using.

Final Location Choices:
- Lounge; we will be using the lounge of one of our actors, Charls. It's modern yet with little natural light, which produces a dark effect.
- Cafe; We plan on making our own cafe set
- Quiet street; the street outside of my house
- Kitchen; Sarah's kitchen, it's bigger than mine and the window is easier to get the shot of Gregg
- Woods; there are some public woods near my house within walking distance which are usually very quiet in the daytime.

Script

When making the script, we all made an input. The script is really important because the actors need it to know their lines and it helps us when through out the planning process.
This is our script:
Neck of the woods Script

Storyboard

The storyboard is important because its the first time the film can be visualised. We can use it to help decide which would be the best locations, shots and help us produce the animatic.

A2 Media Storyboard on Prezi

Target Audience; what our peers thought it would be

From the class discussion we gathered that the class thought the target audience would be:
- Young people who use social networking sites


- The mystical creature appeals to a younger audience


-15-20s because there is some action in there that would appeal to this age group


- People can watch it with their mates; its not serious - an escapism


Twilight is a film which aimed at a similar audience to ours. There audience are teenagers who like the mystical side to it, but isn't a cartoon which is too young for them. Merchandise such as posters, bags, pencil cases ect suggest the film is targeted for teenagers.

Final Treatment

After considering what the class said we decided to take into consideration what they said and made a few changes, this is our final draft:

media_treatment finished